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Neither of them has good translation from the Chinese:
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9 M4 G% S& Z3 Z" W1 z# l1、The Temple of Earth is located in Dongcheng district Beijing. Emperors went here to worship The Earth or Soil in Ming and Qing Dynasties.
7 U$ l+ T2 c1 C* ]7 k2、The Temple of Earth is located in Dongcheng district Beijing. Emperors went to worship earth in Ming and Qing Dynasties.
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1) 地坛位于北京东城区，明清两代皇帝都到那里祭拜土地。 : N! Y. A1 Z) e f1 Y& J
- j4 O! V% z2 n7 j$ }7 da) 这两句的前一句都无大问题，关键是第二句。 , m6 L1 n7 \: p+ }5 m
b）第一个句子翻译本无大问题，但went 是向外的动作，最好跟there搭配 （与come向内搭配here成为一对）。所以并不说明第一句就无问题，但不是什么大问题。 6 o Q- m! |! j: e/ J) u, }
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2）第二句的问题比较大些，earth是专有名词，必须大写另带定冠词连用（the Sun, the Moon and the Earth). 第一句里的用法是正确的。
' ^& F1 S7 \; o) q, v3）这句话很容易就被翻译成正规的汉语，就说明英语就很Chinglish(中式英语）。不妨在英语上再下些功夫，让它听起来更加English。 1 I6 V8 ]) F' E% l7 j; C* d
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4）English:
9 J2 o/ S$ {' J, k4 e1)The Temple of Earth in Beijing is located in Dongcheng district, where Emperors for both Ming and Qing Dynasties used to go and worship the Earth.
4 i# q' i- l& | a# c( A' ^4 p2) Located is the Temple of Earth in Dongcheng district, Beijing, where the Earth used to be the God for Emperors for both Ming and Qing Dynasties to come and worship.
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: l1 K- R, x9 V3 O, X# }Only for your reference. (仅供参考） ( Y4 T# M! Z1 T# J
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(新的英语翻译采用了不同的翻译形式：WHERE引起的非限定定语从句形式；这样就将两个简单句变成了一个复合句式。WHERE是关系副词，也是从句的关联词，所指的都是主句中的THE TEMPLE OF EARTH，文字上也在不改变愿意的基础上稍加修饰，不是那么“中国本土化”的英语了。另外第二句采用了倒装句法，形式更多样化）。
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