关于地坛的译文

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下面两种译法有何不同？第二种译法错了吗？

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1、The ffice:smarttags" />laceType w:st="on">TemplelaceType> of laceName w:st="on">EarthlaceName> is located in Dongcheng district Beijing. Emperors went here to worship The Earth or Soil in Ming and Qing Dynasties.fficeffice" />

 

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2、The laceType w:st="on">TemplelaceType> of laceName w:st="on">EarthlaceName> is located in Dongcheng district Beijing. Emperors went to worship earth in Ming and Qing Dynasties.

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The pleasure is all mine.

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Please come back more for fun in Old Beijing English Forum.

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Neither of them has good translation from the Chinese:

 

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1、The Temple of Earth is located in Dongcheng district Beijing. Emperors went here to worship The Earth or Soil in Ming and Qing Dynasties.

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2、The Temple of Earth is located in Dongcheng district Beijing. Emperors went to worship earth in Ming and Qing Dynasties.

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1) 地坛位于北京东城区，明清两代皇帝都到那里祭拜土地。

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a) 这两句的前一句都无大问题，关键是第二句。

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b）第一个句子翻译本无大问题，但went 是向外的动作，最好跟there搭配 （与come向内搭配here成为一对）。所以并不说明第一句就无问题，但不是什么大问题。

 

2）第二句的问题比较大些，earth是专有名词，必须大写另带定冠词连用（the Sun, the Moon and the Earth). 第一句里的用法是正确的。

3）这句话很容易就被翻译成正规的汉语，就说明英语就很Chinglish(中式英语）。不妨在英语上再下些功夫，让它听起来更加English。

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4）English:

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1)The Temple of Earth in Beijing is located in Dongcheng district, where Emperors for both Ming and Qing Dynasties used to go and worship the Earth.

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2) Located is the Temple of Earth in Dongcheng district, Beijing, where the Earth used to be the God for Emperors for both Ming and Qing Dynasties to come and worship.

 

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Only for your reference. (仅供参考）

 

(新的英语翻译采用了不同的翻译形式：WHERE引起的非限定定语从句形式；这样就将两个简单句变成了一个复合句式。WHERE是关系副词，也是从句的关联词，所指的都是主句中的THE TEMPLE OF EARTH，文字上也在不改变愿意的基础上稍加修饰，不是那么“中国本土化”的英语了。另外第二句采用了倒装句法，形式更多样化）。

lml004

谨承教

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How would you translate these 3 sentences below into proper and authentic English. Is there only      one-way traffic to go for it? Let's try them all. 【您能将下边儿这三句话翻译成较合适的英语吗？是不是只有一种翻译的方法呢？ 要不要试试看。（另外我前边这几句英语和中文翻译您已经看出点儿什么了？）】

 

1）我不知道为什么我特别想笑。

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2）我不知道是谁给了我这本书。

3）我不确定他是否来参加晚会。

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I will begin with the 1st one (我先起个头吧）:

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I know many of you can do it fairly easily without any help from the forum. But the thing I am wondering about is how we can make it sound more English than Chinglish. 我了解很多人可以很容易翻译这个句子而不需要坛子里的任何帮助。而我关心的是怎么让翻译听起来更像英语而没有“国帮腔”的调子。

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1. 我不知道为什么我特别想笑。

 

我们先试着从字面上逐字进行翻译：I do not know why I especially want to laugh.可以说是一字不差，顺序也无问题（考试的话也不会减分）。但从英语语感上，听起来就特别“京帮腔”。或者从一个“本土人”的角度您可能也觉得“不会这么表达”的，所以这就是中国人喜欢套中文的路子进行翻译。其实，根据英语学习的连贯性和慢慢培养起来的“语感”，都会发现为了表达一个意思，可以在不影响原意的基础上，有多重表达方式：

 

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a. I don't know why I want to laugh especially.

b. I don't know why I'd like to laugh at this point.

c. I have no idea why I feel like laughing at the moment.

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d. I wonder why I feel like laughing right now?

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There might be other better expessions for this sentence. But which one is your best choice？And you might want to try others. I do wish we had an English expert here with us.

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也许还有其它更好的表达方式，您更喜欢哪个句子，拿出来晒晒, 同时试试翻译其它的句子。真希望有个英语专家在场。

 

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