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Neither of them has good translation from the Chinese:
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# ]/ W" ?# l5 d5 {- o9 l3 F1、The Temple of Earth is located in Dongcheng district Beijing. Emperors went here to worship The Earth or Soil in Ming and Qing Dynasties.
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2、The Temple of Earth is located in Dongcheng district Beijing. Emperors went to worship earth in Ming and Qing Dynasties.
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* b1 S9 Y$ V* @ _1) 地坛位于北京东城区，明清两代皇帝都到那里祭拜土地。 ; p# Z$ F5 D: J/ t4 ~ S, o, T
# D" ~+ n4 p# Ja) 这两句的前一句都无大问题，关键是第二句。 $ ^, j9 X% s: p0 [
b）第一个句子翻译本无大问题，但went 是向外的动作，最好跟there搭配 （与come向内搭配here成为一对）。所以并不说明第一句就无问题，但不是什么大问题。 ( P7 I7 r! H# A. }
7 @: t9 V: H$ G* q- H8 E2）第二句的问题比较大些，earth是专有名词，必须大写另带定冠词连用（the Sun, the Moon and the Earth). 第一句里的用法是正确的。 ' H9 w, j! f5 W. p$ x0 r8 ^9 F
3）这句话很容易就被翻译成正规的汉语，就说明英语就很Chinglish(中式英语）。不妨在英语上再下些功夫，让它听起来更加English。 4 m% h# p/ e2 t( C
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4）English:
( y3 [' Z' B; w- z1)The Temple of Earth in Beijing is located in Dongcheng district, where Emperors for both Ming and Qing Dynasties used to go and worship the Earth.
) V. M# V1 Q% m) Q, o0 h3 d$ `5 }2) Located is the Temple of Earth in Dongcheng district, Beijing, where the Earth used to be the God for Emperors for both Ming and Qing Dynasties to come and worship. 3 u2 Q1 u1 e. m6 _( g3 W" X
" p" T+ x* p, e3 b+ R7 |Only for your reference. (仅供参考） ' T6 a2 P, m& p, @0 }
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(新的英语翻译采用了不同的翻译形式：WHERE引起的非限定定语从句形式；这样就将两个简单句变成了一个复合句式。WHERE是关系副词，也是从句的关联词，所指的都是主句中的THE TEMPLE OF EARTH，文字上也在不改变愿意的基础上稍加修饰，不是那么“中国本土化”的英语了。另外第二句采用了倒装句法，形式更多样化）。
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