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发表于 2010-6-30 04:55:00 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

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Wang Xiaokang is the Chairman of the Board of China Energy Conservation and Environmental Protection Group.

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Which is batter?1 or 2.

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1.Recently, Its Chairman of the Board Wang XiaoKang took an interview by chief editor Gui Zhenhua of China Green Pictorial .He said: “I want to be the persistant cleaner in china.”

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2.Recently, the Chairman of the Board Wang XiaoKang said in an interview with chief editor Gui Zhenhua of China Green Pictorial : “I want to be the most dedicated cleaner in china.”

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发表于 2010-6-30 12:43:00 | 显示全部楼层

1.Recently, Its Chairman of the Board Wang XiaoKang took an interview by chief editor Gui Zhenhua of China Green Pictorial .He said: “I want to be the persistant cleaner in china.”

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2.Recently, the Chairman of the Board Wang XiaoKang said in an interview with chief editor Gui Zhenhua of China Green Pictorial : “I want to be the most dedicated cleaner in china.”

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These 2 sentences are both grammartically perfect even though I don't quite get the picture of what "cleaner” actually means here for the lack of context. Anyway, I would rather prefer the 1st than the 2nd one. The reason for this is the 2nd one is one single sentence which seems to be too long for the listenner, and the point of the statement is to try to tell the public  in "....." but not whom he got interviewed. Therefore, 2 sentences is far better than one . The second one put an emphasis to clarify the main idea.

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Moreover, this statement sounds like from a news reporter. If so, in ".........", I enjoy the 2nd one much better for a statement as a "big potato" only to be more polite to the public.

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这两句话从语法上都没问题,尽管因为缺乏上下文的内容,我不很确切“cleaner” 在中国场景下含义为何。然而, 我还是更喜欢第一句。原因是第二句(是一个单句)对听者有些太长了。而这一段话的重点是向公众说明括弧里的内容,谁采访了他只是次要的。所以分开两句话要比一个长句好。说第二句话时强调了中心表达的内容(心里话)。我认为这句话听起来像是新闻报道,那样的话,括弧里的话,我倒是更喜欢第二句中的,作为一个“大人物”向公众表态,比较中肯礼貌(the most dedicated)。

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My advice might not be final. Other experts might be of better assistance to you, too.

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Hope you enjoy your English research to better serve Old Beijing and other people.

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